tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1491368809081158836.post3292174257984997026..comments2023-10-29T16:18:52.142-07:00Comments on She May Be Naked But She's Not Stupid: Yet more poetryLizhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04355806806548753255noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1491368809081158836.post-39712386694238736242008-10-08T15:29:00.000-07:002008-10-08T15:29:00.000-07:00Thanks, James! The compliment means a lot coming f...Thanks, James! The compliment means a lot coming from you. And to be completely honest, one of the MAIN reasons I publish my poetry on my blog is so that you'll read it and help me workshop it to its highest version. =) So keep up the critiques.Liz-a-natorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17843219433075940501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1491368809081158836.post-58151541871372939662008-10-07T20:07:00.000-07:002008-10-07T20:07:00.000-07:00Great stuff, Liz. I'm very flattered you used...Great stuff, Liz. I'm very flattered you used my lines as an epigraph.<br><br>My only slight edit would be the fifth or penultimate stanza. It's such a beautiful image of the darkness starting in the corners and swallowing everything up that I would cut the redundant mention of the sun setting before that.<br><br>I mention this only because this is the constant poetry workshopper in me trying to help everyone make things better.<br><br>It's really top notch. One of the best things you've written so far.Guy Mayhemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11828187100384490849noreply@blogger.com